Comments on: THIRTY http://www.laurishaw.com/thirty/ Read Servicing the Pole Sat, 22 May 2010 10:35:10 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.0 By: Lauri http://www.laurishaw.com/thirty/comment-page-1/#comment-592 Lauri Mon, 06 Apr 2009 08:12:11 +0000 http://www.laurishaw.com/?p=722#comment-592 Hi Alicia, That's an interesting point and I'm glad you've raised it. I'm sure there are many strengths and weaknesses in this manuscript based on the way I decided to tell the story, which is episodic rather than tied to one overall story arc. And, as the writer, I'm too close to see either the strengths or the weaknesses. But I did write this with a certain feel in mind. Emily feels, in essence, that she's over the cliff and still falling. To her, there aren't any peaks and valleys. It's just a long way down. I'm happy to hear about the parts you like, and also that you've found the story engaging so far. I do hope the plot itself will draw you back in, because I'm pretty sure the payoff at the end is worth it. Especially if you like fiction that reads like real life, rather than a fairy tale. *wink* Thanks so much for reading, and I really hope you continue to do so. Hi Alicia,

That’s an interesting point and I’m glad you’ve raised it. I’m sure there are many strengths and weaknesses in this manuscript based on the way I decided to tell the story, which is episodic rather than tied to one overall story arc. And, as the writer, I’m too close to see either the strengths or the weaknesses.

But I did write this with a certain feel in mind. Emily feels, in essence, that she’s over the cliff and still falling. To her, there aren’t any peaks and valleys. It’s just a long way down.

I’m happy to hear about the parts you like, and also that you’ve found the story engaging so far. I do hope the plot itself will draw you back in, because I’m pretty sure the payoff at the end is worth it. Especially if you like fiction that reads like real life, rather than a fairy tale. *wink*

Thanks so much for reading, and I really hope you continue to do so.

]]> By: Alicia http://www.laurishaw.com/thirty/comment-page-1/#comment-591 Alicia Sun, 05 Apr 2009 23:53:39 +0000 http://www.laurishaw.com/?p=722#comment-591 I love this story. It's real life and none of that fairy tale bs. But...after thirty chapters I kind of feel like it's not going anywhere, we know her character pretty well by now but nothing is changing. She's doing drugs, getting taken advantage of, and hating her life pretty much. At first when she went to audition for the band I was hopeful SOMETHING was going to happen, like she was going to throw everything down and decide she was tired of hating her life and what she did for a living. Hopefully something will happen to change everything. Keep writing though, you are doing a great job. I like how the characters are built and the story itself is written. I love this story. It’s real life and none of that fairy tale bs. But…after thirty chapters I kind of feel like it’s not going anywhere, we know her character pretty well by now but nothing is changing. She’s doing drugs, getting taken advantage of, and hating her life pretty much. At first when she went to audition for the band I was hopeful SOMETHING was going to happen, like she was going to throw everything down and decide she was tired of hating her life and what she did for a living. Hopefully something will happen to change everything. Keep writing though, you are doing a great job. I like how the characters are built and the story itself is written.

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